Your thesis statement is due Saturday 7 p.m. (Post as a comment.)
Your outline is due Sunday 5 p.m. (Post as "reply.")
Your first draft is due in class on Tuesday.
Your final draft is due in class on Thursday.
Here are some choices for topics. I hope you find a topic that interests you. All of the ideas for this essay should come from YOUR BRAIN, not from the internet. However, if you go to the internet for information or statistics, you must tell me your sources at the end of your essay.
1. How smartphones have impacted our lives (effect)
2. Why students cheat (cause)
3. The effects of divorce on children (effect)
4. How a particular book or movie has influenced your life (effect)
5. An important historical event in your country (cause or effect)
6. Why do people get married nowadays? (cause)
7. Why did you/will you choose your major? (cause)
Please select one topic and send me your thesis statement by tomorrow (Friday). After I approve your thesis, I want you to send me your basic outline for the essay.
I look forward to reading your VERY THOUGHTFUL ESSAYS.
Smartphones have had three important effects on our lives.
ReplyDeleteGood. Post your outline below.
DeleteOutline of my essay:
DeleteHow Smartphones Have Impacted Our Lives
With the rapid development of modern science and technology, smartphones have become an indispensable part of people’s daily life and work. Smartphone is a kind of great invention that has changed people’s lives. In every different field, it’s more and more widely applied. There’re three effects of smartphones, not only positive, but also negative.
The first effect of smartphones is bringing people a lot of convenience and efficiency. It’s definitely a positive and practical effect.
Making people get a mobile phone addiction is the second effect of smartphones. In fact, it’s a serious and negative effect.
In addition to using and addiction, bringing some healthy problems to people is another effect of smartphones. It’s also negative, and should be given attention.
Overall, invention of smartphones is really a great progress of human development of science and technology. People are enjoying the positive effect brought by the smartphones, at the same time, also should pay attention to the negative and various problems.
Okay, I look forward to reading your thoughtful essay. I'm not sure what you mean by "healthy problems" in paragraph 3, but I'm confident you will explain what you mean.
DeleteThere are three main reasons that people decided to get married.
ReplyDeletegood. Post your outline below.
DeleteWhy Do People Get Married Nowadays?
DeleteNowadays, many single people like to live alone because they think getting married is hard work. Sometimes they forget that getting married can make their better life in the long-term. Moreover, it has someone stays with them in the difficult situation and pleasure situation. There are three main reasons that people decided to get married.
Supporting idea 1 : Love and understand are the first reason of people decided to get married.
Supporting idea 2 : Building a family is another reason that people decided to get married.
Supporting idea 3 : The people have to follow their old traditional culture is another cause that people get married.
In conclusion, these are three reasons that people get married. It isn’t easy to find the better half of life to help you build a strong family. Although many people have to follow their tradition culture, it’s impossible that they get married without love and understanding. How about you? Why do you get married?
This looks good.
DeleteThesis statement: Parents' divorce has three effects on children.
ReplyDeleteA parents' divorce has three effects on children.
DeleteGood.
Show me your outline.
Thesis statement: A parents’ devoice has three effects on children: characters, interpersonal relationship and marriage attitude.
Delete1. Characters
1) Introverted
2) Precocious
3) Rigid
2. Interpersonal relationship
1) Unsociable
2) Cautious about interpersonal communication
3. Marriage attitude
1) Anti-marriage
2) Don’t like to have kids
A parents' divorce can affect the children's character, their interpersonal relationships, and their attitude toward marriage.
DeleteI'm not sure I agree with your points, but I look forward to reading what you have to say. (For example, a child of divorce might be even more pro-marriage than average, but I don't know the research on this topic).
A divorce has two sides. Whether it affects children or not, it depends on many aspects.
DeleteI have a little doubt about the topic now.
Are you still going to write about this?
DeleteYes. I will try even if it's vey tricky.
DeleteDon't worry too much. This is a writing class, not a psychology class.
DeleteThere are three main reasons that smartphones have impacted to our lives.
ReplyDeleteIncorrect. This is a paper about EFFECT, not CAUSE.
DeleteCause answers the question WHY.
Effect answers the question HOW, or IN WHAT WAY.
Try again.
Smartphones have impacted to our lives by changing the way to communicate, kids become inactive, and adults depend on smartphones.
DeleteGood, but we need parallel structure. How about this:
DeleteSmartphones have impacted our lives in three ways: by changing the way we communicate, by making kids inactive, and by causing adults to become unnaturally dependent on them.
Delete1.By changing the way we communicate.
People send message instead of send mail.
People don’t have to carry computer, they are just using smartphone to write an email.
People are talking to each other while they still in the same house.
Everyone is focusing on their phone when they have family reunion.
2.By making kids inactive.
They sit their room to playing game.
Kids stay in the house all day.
They don't want to talk to anyone.
3. By causing adults to become unnaturally dependent on them
Checking on cell phone every 10 second.
Eyes always look at the cellphone screen.
Using cell phone to take a selfie everyday.
Checks Social Media in every minutes in work-time.
It looks like this will be a very well-developed paper with thoughtful examples. I look forward to reading it.
DeleteThere are three bad effects smartphones have impacted to our lives.
ReplyDeleteSmartphones have negatively impacted our lives in three ways.
DeleteShow me your outline.
By having a lot of accidents using cellphone while driving or walking.
DeleteTalking on phone can make you get in an accident.
Walking on street nowadays people using their phone and can hit people or run into trees.
Lots of kids using smartphones.
By playing lots of games.
Kids are being distracted by phone at school.
kids are using smartphones in a bad way.
Smartphones make people spending their free time on their cellphone.
It make us stay away from family.
it harm the relationship of people in your house and outside.
This is not a clear outline of your points.
DeleteThere are thee consequence that the use of smartphones brings to our lives: The communication is easier, the apps downloaded help us in everyday life, and the excessive use of it can distracts us from the persons around us.
ReplyDeleteI think in the body of the essay you should focus on either the positive effects or the negative effects.
DeleteLet's say you focus on the positive effects in the body. Then you could list the negative effects in the introduction. Your thesis will begin with "However,... three positive consequences..."
This is just a suggestion.
Send me your outline.
There are three positive effects that the smartphones bring to our lives:
Delete1- Communicating is easier:
- You can do instant calls
- The Internet and wifi allows you to do international calls without extra cost.
- You can send instant messages
- handicapped people are able to communicate a lot quicker with anyone
2- The apps downloaded on cell phones helps us in everyday life:
- GPS is one of the most apps used and helps us to go from one place to another.
- The apps that helps us to translate languages are very useful too.
- The possibility to take photos is another positive use of the smartphones
- Plus so many useful apps like games, how to cook, health, etc
3- The smartphones are easy to carry:
- Almost all are light, small, and easy to carry
- They have many accessories like chargers, hand or cars supports, carry on batteries.
3. This is not an effect. The question is how have smartphones affected our lives?
DeleteThere was an important historical event in my country that affect all citizen in my country
ReplyDeletePlease be more specific.
DeleteThere was an important event in my country. in 1860 the President of my country pass a law that every children most to go to the school. and this law have had two main effects in all citizen of my country
DeleteDo you mean 1960? Until what age is the school mandatory?
DeleteThesis: The law for compulsory (elementary?) school has had two main effects on the citizens of Chile.
Send me your outline.
Outline for causes and affects
Deletecause: The President of Chile Manuel Montt in the year 1860 pass the law for compulsory school, and every children from 7 to 14 years old have had to go to the school.
Effects Education
example 1 Children learn to read, write, and math
example 2 After 6 year in the school the children can learn any profession
Effect Economic
example 1 Well-educated people did better business and paid more taxes.
example 2 Better income for the family.
Conclusion
One man idea changed the whole history of this country the free education for children was positive effect in learning, better job, more income. and better position in the society.
Okay, so there are two effects of free public education in Chile. I look forward to reading your essay.
DeleteSmartphones have three effects on our lives
ReplyDeleteOkay. Show me your outline.
DeleteHow Smartphones have Impacted our Lives
DeleteThesis : Smartphones have three effects on our lives
1- Driving :-
a- The impact on the person himself
b- Influence others
2- Family and friends :-
a- Communication
3- Introverts :-
a- Harmful to the same person
Conclusion :
In conclusion, use of smartphones in a way with out responsible may lead the loss of yourself and neglecting for himself and his family.
Okay, but I hope you will be clear in your examples and explanations.
DeleteThere are three main reasons why Korea has seperated as South and North for 67 years.
ReplyDeleteThere are three main reasons why Korea has been divided for the past 67 years.
DeleteI look forward to a good history lesson!
outline
DeleteThere are three main reasons why Korea has been divided for past 67 years.
The first reason why Korea has been divided is Korean war happened in 1950.
The second factor in why korea has been divided is different political ideologies between South and North Korea.
The last cause of why Korea has been divided is the power of Kim's family of North Korea.
There are two ways to reunify the two countries.
A possible transition to introduce the last cause:
DeleteThe Korean War happened sixty-seven years ago, so why is Korea still divided today? This leads us to the final cause.
Also, did the first cause (the war) come before the second cause (the different ideologies) or did the second cause LEAD TO the first cause (the war)?
There are three bad effect of divorce on children.
ReplyDeleteOkay. Send me your outline.
DeleteA parents divorce has three effect on children
ReplyDeleteWhat are the three effects?
DeleteThere are three main reasons that students cheat
ReplyDeleteOutline:
DeleteNowadays, there are many students in high school that they do not like school. Also, they don’t like pay attention even study for their exams. Sometimes they forget that school is an essential way to success in life. In fact, student look the easy way to pass the school, cheat. There are three main reason that students cheat.
1. The first reason that the students cheat is, they are not preparing for exams.
2. The second reason that the students cheat is, they don’t care about school.
3. The third reason that the students cheat is, they pay more attention to stuff that is not relative to school.
Are all of these separate effects or is there some overlap?
Deleteoutline： The healthy growth of children needs to be in a good family. If in divorced family， that will effects children's mental health. There are three bad effects of divorce on children.
ReplyDelete1. Children will insecure
2.Children will be inferiority
3.Children will be rebellious
Are you going to be able to explain all of these effects?
DeleteThere are three main effects of smartphones in our lives
ReplyDeleteShow me the outline.
DeleteThere are three ways how smartphones have impacted our lives.
ReplyDeleteThere are three ways in which smartphones have impacted our lives.
DeleteShow me your outline.
outline :
ReplyDeleteThere are three reasons to choose the chemical engineering.
1.Having a work opportunities
2.Fair income
3.Personal intrest
There are three reasons I chose chemical engineering as a major: increased work opportunities, a good income, and my personal interest in the field.
DeleteShould you put the most important cause first or last?
Why did you choose your major?
ReplyDeleteTopic. There ate three main reasons why I decided to be a preschool teacher.
Supporting 1. The many opportunities to work in the field educational is the first reason that I decided to be a preschool teacher.
Supporting 2. The second reason I decided to be a teacher is the benefit to have free time every weekend and every holiday.
Supporting 3. Love and teach to others are the last reason that I decided to be a preschool teacher.
This looks good. I look forward to reading the full essay.
DeleteWhy will you choose your major?
ReplyDeleteThesis statement. there are three reasons why I will choose to study finance.